Ravaging Times

March 3, 2009

help me proof the translation

Filed under: Uncategorized — merc @ 9:47 am

Feel free to pick out errors in the English! Or suggest better wording! Some “mistakes” might be intentional, but I’m really a mediocre writer. Thanks! (don’t have to register to leave a comment here)

August 14, 2015

chapter 445 (magazine syndication, not final)

Filed under: Ravages of Time — merc @ 7:14 am

Cao Cao was defeated at Red Cliff in 208 A.D. and lost his main forces. Warlords everywhere then used the opportunity to stir up trouble.

The chaos spread from the north to the south, spiraling out of control.

{Leiyang, a southern city}

[?]: I say, the battle of Red Cliff sure taught “our Lord” a lesson.
[?]: Hahaha, you got a death wish? Making fun of the “Prime Minister”.

[?]: Piss off. Us southerners never regard a rebel as our Lord.
(rephrased)

[?]: Since we’re thinking of leaving Cao, anybody got a clever idea?

chapter 445 New Blood From The South
(“southern new soldier”)

[?]: In my humble opinion, why don’t we strike out now and make a name for ourselves?

[?]: Sounds reasonable, little bro, but was it your place to talk?
[?]: Yeah, it’s too early for you to pursue fame, youngster.

[?]: Sun Ce was about my age back then, wasn’t he?

[?]: Ptttt.
(spit take)

[?]: Hahaha, piss off. Like you two are even comparable.
(reworded)
[?]: You ain’t even twenty yet. Ever been on a battlefield? Do you know what it means to kill?

[?]: You’re drunk, old Li. Stop splitting hair with a youngster.
[?]: Yeah. Don’t forget his sponsor.

[?]: Phooey. A pretty face may be backing him, but our Lord isn’t like that.
[?]: Men have fun when it’s called for. But an undertaking for the future is the important thing.
(not sure)

[?]: Haha, a man’s fun night may be worth dying for too.

[?]: Are you talking about those two recent rumors?

[?]: I also heard about that- about Guiyin and Guihe, right?

[?]: The funny thing is… both magistrates were killed by a beautiful woman.

[?]: It’s just a rumor. You all remember that organization called “Handicapped Warriors” over ten years ago?

[?]: Yeah, that folklore about a group of cripples who killed every one of their target.
[?]: Whoa ho, what a load of overblown bullshit!
(reworded)

[?]: The head count’s done. Should I notify our Lord?

[?]: Just a while longer. Our Lord is having fun with the “assassin chick”.

[?]: I’ll ask you one more time. Wanna join me?
(“…want with old [me] cooperate”)

[?]: Haha, cocky brat.
(“…young [me] turned old [me]”, wordplay lost in translation)

[?]: Cocky… how about you stop that nonsense.
[?]: Drunken raving is still a punishable offense.
(slightly distorted, it should really mean inappropriate utterances is still inexcusable)

[?]: Forget him. We’ll make our decision before our Lord comes.
[?]: The scout says Liu Bei’s army is attacking our south.

[?]: His main force is still defending their base. The troop he sent is small; not difficult to finish off.
[?]: Yes. Besides, his ally is too tied up by Jia Xu in Jiangling to provide aid.

[?]: They’ll have worn each other down no matter who wins. That’s to our benefit.
[?]: Yes. We should head south now and take Guiyang first…

{sfx: pong}

[?]: Who closed the door?

[?]: One last time. Wanna work with your granddad?

[?]: Granddad… Ugh. I’ve had it!
[?]: Yeah. This boy harps on and on. So annoying.

[?]: Just hold out a bit. He won’t have teeth once our Lord gets bored with his “master”.

[?]: You got no business here, boy! Scram!

[?]: I asked. Now take the consequences.

{sfx: cha cha}

[?]: I’ve killed many people.

[?]: I warn them first to lessen the guilt.

[?]: Boy, you…
[?]: Assassin! Send men to protect our Lord!

[?]: His room is being heavily guarded! Don’t “lure” him out!

[?]: Besides, our Lord has fought enough battles to not fear an assassin!
(Is this grammatically correct? It’s meant to say he won’t feel threatened by an assassin.)

[?]: That’s right. And we’re no “slouch” either.
[?]: Yes! It’ll be a joke if the dozen of us still need reinforcement!

[?]: Compare to those at Guiyin and Guihe…

[?]: you guys are so much weaker.

[?]: However, thanks for your courtesy.

[?]: By the likes of you?

{sfx: cha}

[?]: Yup.

[?]: It’s certainly easier to fight a dozen men

[?]: than a hundred!

[?]: C’mere. One.
(“again come…”)

[?]: Two, three, four…

[?]: Five,
[?]: six,
[?]: seven,
[?]: eight,
[?]: nine.

[?]: Twelve.

{sfx: cha}

[?]: One more.

[?]: Come out.

[?]: Out.

{sfx: cha}

[?]: Hm.

{sfx: pa}

[?]: Still slower than me.

[?]: Leader, was it a smooth “process”?

[?]: Smooth… Too bad any husband of mine must die.

[?]: Yet… still can’t beat first and second masters. The door has barely shut, and already nothing but silence outside.

[?]: Please come in, sirs. Let’s head for the back door.
[?]: Okay.

[?]: Leiyang’s boss and his head lackeys are dead. Chaos shall reign.

[?]: Within three days this place will follow in Guiyin and Guihe’s footsteps and cozy up to old Zhao.

[?]: We of Guiyang shall easily gain the strength of three cities without casualties.

[?]: Yes. Opening a path through Leiyang today will allow reinforcements to be send to Magistrate Han Xuan in Changsha.

[?]: The timing is perfect. Teacher would be glad to hear about this.

[?]: Yes. A worthy rival is hard to come by.

[?]: Not to mention this guy is better than Lü Bu…

[?]: Master Huang won’t be the only one who’s glad. So are we!
(this “master” means “teacher”; it’s just awkward to call someone “teacher Huang”)

[?]: Hehe, even first master Wei is growing impatient.

July 28, 2015

volume 55 afterwords

Filed under: Ravages of Time — Tags: — merc @ 8:40 pm

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(from the end of volume 55; scan found on baidu forums)

Written for volume 55.

There have always been readers asking me: “Where would the conflict be in a work without a clear divide between loyalty and corruption? And what stance do each of the hegemons take?” Starting with this volume, I will try to explain whenever there’s a spare moment.

In the feudal ages, the greedy and corrupt nature of the Chinese people meant that a dynastic rule will always result in conflicts after a certain period. A war-torn era would then follow!

From Liu Xiu’s coronation in 25 A.D. to Cao Pi’s usurpation of Han in 220 A.D., it took a hundred and nine-six years. East Han was beyond saving. Having lost the support of the people, “Han” was looking at a regime change sooner or later. It was only a matter of whoever used the right opportunity…

It’s like the political scene now, “the rise of a conqueror” requires a convincing line of argument and goal – for the people and to save lives – to have one’s own faction end up dominating the world. Obviously I believe the historians of the time will pen the losing side as “self-important (crowning self as emperor) and self-serving.”

My humble work “The Ravages of Time” has made it to volume 55, yet the story is still full of nonsense and pretentiousness. To help the readers understand how chaotic the Han’s demise was, I’ll try to present each character as “in the right” (???), and use modern day political factions as reference. Treat it like a joke.

If you want the people to serve you, champion a method that prioritizes the masses, eliminates corruption and scums.

Below are each character’s political platform:

* Dong Zhuo’s faction was intolerant of corruption. They entered the capital through radicalism, believing that only a total reform could save the world. Unfortunately their political leader was killed. As their main ideal teeters, they were plunged into disarray and ultimately destroyed.

* Yuan Shao led the conservatives with centuries of Loyalist baggage to boot. He had to toe the party line but also fend off attacks from other factions. Hence he started up a second track with “Yuan Fang”, whose job was to break out of the constraints and gain votes elsewhere.

* Yuan Shu headed the honest faction. Why not crown himself when “Han” had failed? He was the first to turn his back on “Han”. Unfortunately his similar-minded opponents knew to hide their true intentions and attack him using this point, costing him all of his votes…

* The Sun clan had no baggage. They prided themselves on self-reliance, and “continuous enterprise” was their greatest motivating factor to the working class. (As long as they agreed on “continuation” in principle, even the bloodiest inter-party feud can be put aside for the sake of progress.)

* Cao Cao represented the faction with power of propaganda. Basically he would appear in any form of media, since he would be dragged into any event. Whoever dominated the media dominated the world, and he won by a landslide at Guandu.

* And Liu Bei worked at the grassroots level. He knew that a small political faction must toil away in secret. He came from a decent background, but he needed a campaign manager. After he finally obtained Kong Ming, he won the election in the western area and became the biggest opposition.

Obviously there were various factions in each area. Through appointment or heritage, or even religion… There were too many types to cover.

With this guide I hope you all will have an easier time reading “The Ravages of Time.” Haha.
(at first I also got the impression that he meant not to take it too seriously and be stuck on hating the plotholes or favoritism of characters, etc.)

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